THE CRUCILBE prac essay mark me..... please!!!!

[Faraz]

In The Crucible conflict brings out unexpected qualities in people

Essay

In the “The Crucible” a play written by Arthur Miller based on the witch-hunt of the 1692 colonial Massachusetts. He demonstrates that in times of conflict hidden aspects arise among men. This is continuously illustrated by the writer throughout the text, shown strongly even in the minor characters of the play Giles Corey, Thomas Putnam and Mary Warren. Not including the obvious choices. Each character’s deeply hidden aspects arise throughout the town’s dilemma, from the honoured to the pitied.

Giles Corey is one of the middle class members of the town of Salem, he is known has a hardworking farmer and fair by his fellow townsmen. During the witchcraft dilemma his wife is accused of being a witch. Giles uncovers from an unknown source that this accusation is sparked by Thomas Putnam who is a wealth and highly ranked member of Salem. Giles uses this evidence in court in an attempt to protect his spouse. The court commands him to reveal who had told him of this news; he refuses and dies to his words reasons being the person would be jail or even hanged. He endures pain and suffering for what he believed to be right and righteous, where others revealed as soon as they knew their own doom. Bravery and honour emerged from an old man where the young did not.

Thomas Putnam a high ranked member of the town of Salem, is a wealthy and prosperous man and in powerful. During the witch hunt he directs his daughter to accuse Giles Corey’s wife of witchcraft. This action is an attempt to take Giles Corey’s land which he had sought after from the beginning of the play. This roguish act of greed and incrimination only for the self gain is an unexpected quality of a respected and all ready somewhat wealth man of the town.

Mary Warren the servant of the Procter family is of the lowest class of the town serving others and having little impact or saying on Salem’s direction. She was one of the accused girls of the witchcraft rituals in the beginning. Mary considers herself an "official of the court" at the beginning of the trials and one of the eldest of the group of girls. Yet when Elizabeth Procter is accused and taken, she is abused and beaten by John Procter until she gives in to saying the truth at the court for Elizabeth’s freedom. In the court she changes sides in an attempt to free herself certain death when the girls tell of her spirit calling. Her cowardly and weakness come to the surface; If she had acted correctly it could have ended the dilemma and saved countless lives.

Arthur Miller portrays throughout the script that people’s true nature only emerges in the face of conflict and as demonstrated in the play either in their self gain or for the sake of others. In the case of Salem, the villains and heroes can with ease be depicted when in other times impossible.




its really short I know I find it extremely hard to write anything on crucible so if anyone has anything that can help..

[Faraz]

come ON plzzzz... im waiting

[xox.happy1.xox]

I'm going to be really harsh, so I'm sorry if I offend you...

One word... Storytelling. You need to stop this immediately. Avoid such lines as "Thomas Putnam a high ranked member of the town of Salem, is a wealthy and prosperous man and in powerful." and "he is known has a hardworking farmer and fair by his fellow townsmen.". I'm sure the assessor knows a brief knowledge of the characters, and hence, this would be unnecessary.

Also, include more quotes if you can. This exemplifies the fact that you are actually analysing the play, rather than just simply rote repeating the information provided.

Also, it would benefit you if you did not start each topic with the name of the character. That draws away from the credibility of your argument, and allows you to be susceptible to simply re-telling information about the character rather than analysing the topic.

Also, try to use techniques such as 'retrospective', 'flashbacks' and 'traditional linear' if possible. These are new and creative ways in which you can bring out the essence in your essay, and furthermore, aspects of writing you are expected to employ in the exam this year.

Try to aim for 6-7 paragraphs in the exam, as opposed to your 5 presented here. I believe this barely scraped 500 words, and we are expected to write 800-1000 for each essay (with the new study design which incorporates 1 hour for each of the 3 essays).

Also, try to work on your introduction and conclusion. They seem very general, and the words could be easily manipulated to suit a wide variety of essay prompts. For example, the first two sentences could basically be written for anything related to The Crucible; any topic. I would advise you to create topics which are difficult to manipulate, for example, 'As individuals suffer, many different traits and attributes are exposed to allow certain people to be vulnerable in these situations. In Arthur Miller's "The Crucible"...' and continue. This is more personalised, and moreover, relates to the topic at hand (and is much less likely to be manipulated as well).

That's all for now... Hope you learn from my criticism.
 

[Faraz]

Yep thank you 

Can you explain to me 'retrospective', 'flashbacks' and 'traditional linear' and how I use them cause I have no idea..

like how would I do a flashback in a essay 

[ReVeL]

Reads to much like a text response in my opinion.

Needs more discussion about the conflict and how/why it brings out unexpected qualities.

[rowshan]

Metalanguage in a context essay is not required. Yes, this sounds very much like a text response essay. You could make it sound more like a context essay if you included historical or contemporary examples that proves the topic sentence.

You need to show an understanding of "encountering conflict" , the complexities of your thought, the ideas that you have generated over the past year. Here, the ideas and examples are rather simple and boring. But, probably better than what i could come up so overall well done.

[ausyid]

Oh haha I thought it was a text response essay.

[Glockmeister]

The topic question makes it seem like a text response essay actually.

[xox.happy1.xox]

Isn't it a text response essay? :O

[rowshan]

No, although the topic sentence makes it look like one. Essays relating to the crucible are supposed to be about "encountering conflict." That is a really crappy essay topic!

[sisqo1111]

i thought it was a text response too. context essays do not provide prompts relating to one specific text from its context. it should allow you to write about any text in the context!

[bridgethuss]

the context section wont mention one of the texts in the topic.. its just going to be like "conflict can challenge a persons values" or something like that, about the conflict, it wont mention the secret river shows this or the crucible shows that