Hey AN, this is my first LA of the year that I was assigned to complete for holiday homework, just looking to get some feedback on the areas I need to improve on which I can then use to progress throughout the year. At the moment, I'm really struggling to write conclusions and know for the fact that the one here is rubbish to say the least. Anyways, the link to the article is
http://www.theaustralian.com.au/news/editorial-time-to-get-student-behaviour-in-order/story-e6frg6n6-1226630646108. Thanks!
In the various forms of punishments available to the modern day teacher, debate in regards to the effectiveness of such tools when handling troubled students has resurfaced. The difficulty of it all being, what actions are disruptive enough to receive punishment and afterward what the most appropriate punishment should be. Nevertheless, in The Sunday Mail’s editorial “Time to get student behaviour in order” the author, in response to Minister Langbroek’s simplification of legislation, displays a tone of hope and optimism. Resultantly, the author who sternly opposes the “days of corporal punishment” contends for the need to alter the disciplinary process, however, accepts that even though the system will never be flawless and as long as a learning environments are improved for all, that in itself is suffice.
The author attempts to instill a progressive outlook on restructuring the disciplinary system by providing historic references. Beginning with an expression of relief “ Long gone, thankfully, are the days of corporal punishment” a sense of progression is established in a role to ease readers into prospects of yet another reform. Hinging on the prideful mentality of “we have done it before, we can do it again” the author is able to align readers to feel optimistic in the proposal to change the process of punishment and thus look towards new solutions. Comprised of parents, the audience are inclined to place themselves at the frontier of the proposed changes as a means of effectively removing the “disruptive and belligerent behaviour” that may be undermining the education of their own children. Additionally, the author readily makes the assumption that the readership already has disdained views of corporal punishment. The inclusion of “While no right-thinking person wants to see a return to … arbitrary corporal punishment” creates a dichotomy that acts to alienate those who support the notion of corporal punishment and henceforth label them as individuals that have adopted a backwards thinking mentality. In return, the audience are likely espouse the view that changes need to be made to the existing system out of fear they may fall into the category of backwards thinkers.
In addressing the potential solutions, the author employs a sense of community to highlight the widespread benefits of dealing with issues in the otherwise confined classroom. By inclusion of authoritative figure “education minister John-Paul Langbroek” the audience are engendered to feel deeply concerned. The acknowledgement of the problem by a parliamentary representative alerts readers of the magnitude in which this problem poses such that government intervention is necessary. Thus, as governmental matters are often serious in nature and deal with aspects of society in whole, the readership are urged to band together as a community to solve the issue in a swift manner. The reader’s fear of feeling at risk to the repercussions also plays a role in driving parents to look for a next best solution as to avoid the potential of poorly behaved children having an effect on their own. In subtly drawing out the need for an answer, the author proposes that a “partnership between schools and parents and, in some cases, local communities” is required thereby indicating this heavy reliance on community. Not only does this induce an ersatz sense of family that creates thoughts of obligation but also draws readers who many not be directly affected to veer in on this issue as well. “[Simplified], friendly and practical” the description of new legislation at last, eases people from potentially feeling burdened if they wanted to get involved in this movement. This scheme that is shrouded by this idea of being “local” which is also capable of “[making] a real difference” engenders readers to act upon a set goal that when achieved will resonate positively throughout society.
The author transitions towards inducing a sense of heartache for the teachers who have been left abandoned. In contrast to the rest of the article, the author’s decision to shift towards the struggles of teachers outlines a sense of realism. Accompanying the piece, the photograph depicting a teacher with clenched fists shows that not only are other students being disrupted by “belligerent” behaviour but also teachers too. Reduced to merely a distributor of punishment, the clear sign of frustration displayed by both his both body language and scrunched face portrays a feeling of helplessness in the teacher whose role is to provide enlightening education. As a result, this may invoke parents into feeling enraged for the teacher as disruption has inhibited his ability to teach which will consequently also deprive students that may be their own children from the knowledge that he may have to offer. “ A punitive option with some weight” further mentions the lack of resources teachers have at hand and ultimately establishes the feeling of despair and abandonment. Subsequently, the illustration of teachers as these neglected individuals is likely to galvanize readers into feeling responsible and guilty for the lack of support they are receiving and, therefore, push towards a new motion.
The calm and reasoned tone nearing the article’s end displays the author’s clear-mindedness towards the issue. Through presenting themselves in a controlled manner, a confidence is exuded, thus reaffirming to readers that the proposed pathway is the correct way to go. In addition, the acknowledgement that “No system will ever be perfect” allows readers to feel that the ideas presented are not flawless but therefore reasonable. The optimism in which the authors end on, in aiming to enhance the current learning environment, is a lasting reassurance to readers that simply makes their view easier to accept.