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Re: Official ATAR Notes ‘Post Your Poetry’ Thread
« Reply #15 on: April 05, 2018, 08:07:19 pm »
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Ok so I've got one here....but I wrote it a few years back (when i was 12) so forgive me for its total lack of structure and everything else. It was just literally my thoughts flowing onto the paper. I wrote it the day that my 20 year old brother was killed in a car accident. At that point we had no further information and that was all we had been told by the police.....I went into my bedroom alone and put my pen to paper and this is what came out.....

A bright face, a happy smile
Laughing, caring all the whlie
Tall, strong, his straight brown hair
I can see him in my mind, but when I look, he's not there.

It was today, a bright Friday morning,
It all came without any warning,
"A car crash", "killed", that's all we know
But the Lord was there, and in time He will show.

He was ready, that's all we can say,
Ready for the Lord to come and take him away,
Away from us yes, but from the world too,
Away up to heaven, where all skies are blue.

He's now with the Lord, and with those that are already gone,
And yes, although our hearts are torn,
We know that one day we'll see him once more,
When we, with renewed strength, and wings as eagles soar.


So yeah...its not the greatest poem in the world...but just thought I'd share it :) No prizes for guessing that I'm a Christian either....hope that doesn't worry anyone!  ;) :D
Brought tears to my eyes. A really genuine and lovely poem. And a very brave poet behind it.
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Re: Official ATAR Notes ‘Post Your Poetry’ Thread
« Reply #16 on: August 16, 2018, 09:40:05 pm »
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Time to bump this thread! Feels almost like a responsibility for someone with my username, haha

A friend suggested I post this with an explanation. It's been circulating in my head for a while tonight, and I hope you guys find it interesting:

Poem
Opened eyes, a bright and shining world
Where did the light go?
Days fly by,
Time march inexorably,
Reflections of souls in their bubbles.

To the mind's eye, is soul the truth?
Is skin all we see and know?
Clenched fists,
But an open heart,
The fight for honesty and love.

Such beauty and grace
In the iridescent reality.
Curled asleep,
Ignorance or arrogance
We'll never know the truth of a soul
Until it's gone
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Explanation and existential thoughts
Opened eyes, a bright and shining world
Where did the light go?
Days fly by,
Time march inexorably,
Reflections of souls in their bubbles.


^ This is about getting older, and learning as we go. But it's also about the "bubbles" of everyone's lives. Like, we all have our personal perceptions based on our own experiences and stuff, right? Everything in the world comes back to us. Us in our bubbles.

To the mind's eye, is soul the truth?
Is skin all we see and know?
Clenched fists,
But an open heart,
The fight for honesty and love.


^ This is about the perception of beauty - judging the outside before we dare to look in. Sometimes, what's on the outside is not in line with a person's heart, and we can misjudge people unfairly and cruelly from this, or make mistakes and lend our trust to someone who will break it.

Such beauty and grace
In the iridescent reality.
Curled asleep,
Ignorance or arrogance
We'll never know the truth of a soul
Until it's gone.

^ The first lines refer back to the sheen of a bubble - rainbow reflection, twisting, iridescent. Every person's life is individual and beautiful in some way or another, but all too often all we know of their story is the beauty after they're gone.

I wrote this because I was thinking a lot. About people. And what we care about. And why we care about it. Perceptions and individual realities. You know how comics and shows have theories on diverging realities out there? Well, what if there are already ones, right here? Everyone sees the world differently. That's a divergence. Everyone lives in their little circles of family, friendship, work, compassion, ignorance. Our bubbles, because our perceptions have roofs and floors as well as horizontal boundaries.
You're both the fire and the water that extinguishes it.
You're the narrator, the protagonist, and the sidekick.
You're the storyteller and the story told.
You are somebody's something, but you are also your you.

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Re: Official ATAR Notes ‘Post Your Poetry’ Thread
« Reply #17 on: September 24, 2018, 05:26:37 pm »
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Thought i'd bump this thread by posting something i wrote:

Truly all life is,
is just a constant struggle
From one moment to another
From one moment of true happiness
And beauty
to another
Surviving everything in between
All the struggle, the heartbreak
and the negativity
The seemingly never ending cycle-
of life
and the way it drains you.
But we live for those rare moments
when we forget everything
and we feel truly alive
Find those moments
and hold them,
treasure them
Because that is what we live for
The meaning of life
"Live life like a pineapple. Stand tall, wear a crown and be sweet on the inside"

"May you grow up to be righteous; may you grow up to be true. May you always know the truth and see the lights surrounding you. May you always be courageous, stand upright and be strong"

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Re: Official ATAR Notes ‘Post Your Poetry’ Thread
« Reply #18 on: January 13, 2019, 08:31:37 pm »
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Where are you now? I am here
Under the willow tree
I am here folding paper cranes
Each crease a memory

First step, second, third then pause -
unfold and realign -
Flatten the accidental crease
With hope it will be fine

Tuck it under stacks of books
Press it 'tween some things
But even if its head's in place
It still has broken wings

Where are you now? I am here,
Flightless bird in my hand
My dear dreams, why have you flown
When I am still on land?
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Re: Official ATAR Notes ‘Post Your Poetry’ Thread
« Reply #19 on: January 13, 2019, 08:42:51 pm »
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Where are you now? I am here
Under the willow tree
I am here folding paper cranes
Each crease a memory

First step, second, third then pause -
unfold and realign -
Flatten the accidental crease
With hope it will be fine

Tuck it under stacks of books
Press it 'tween some things
But even if its head's in place
It still has broken wings

Where are you now? I am here,
Flightless bird in my hand
My dear dreams, why have you flown
When I am still on land?

you read my mind on bumping this thread haha

This is beautiful. 

the imagery is vibrant and I absolutely love the metaphorical weight of a paper crane.
If it's not personal, what's the inspiration? :)
You're both the fire and the water that extinguishes it.
You're the narrator, the protagonist, and the sidekick.
You're the storyteller and the story told.
You are somebody's something, but you are also your you.

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Re: Official ATAR Notes ‘Post Your Poetry’ Thread
« Reply #20 on: January 13, 2019, 08:54:15 pm »
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you read my mind on bumping this thread haha

This is beautiful. 

the imagery is vibrant and I absolutely love the metaphorical weight of a paper crane.
If it's not personal, what's the inspiration? :)

Haha thank you! I love writing poetry so I'll happily bump this thread ^^

I write a lot of metaphorical poetry, especially to address little thoughts in my mind :) This particular one was inspired by the gradual cynicism that comes with growing up, where dreams of doing the impossible were reduced to "the impossible". Dreams get narrower and narrower until one day you realise that you can't pinpoint any of the dreams you once had or would like to have. Without a goal in mind, we complete small tasks to pass the time - in this case folding paper cranes. There is a legend that if you fold 1000 paper cranes you will be granted a wish, and I saw the folding of a single crane as a step towards finding your dreams again.

I really like your poems as well! Your username is certainly fitting  ;)
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Re: Official ATAR Notes ‘Post Your Poetry’ Thread
« Reply #21 on: January 27, 2019, 04:24:38 pm »
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Where are you now? I am here
Under the willow tree
I am here folding paper cranes
Each crease a memory

First step, second, third then pause -
unfold and realign -
Flatten the accidental crease
With hope it will be fine

Tuck it under stacks of books
Press it 'tween some things
But even if its head's in place
It still has broken wings

Where are you now? I am here,
Flightless bird in my hand
My dear dreams, why have you flown
When I am still on land?


After reading this, I had to say it was simply sublime. I felt it was almost ethereal, the way you portrayed this metaphorical poetry. I loved reading the meaning behind it, and also using poetry to express what we can't in any other way is something I resonate with. Reading it gave me a sense of inner peace and I thank you for sharing your beautiful talent, please do share more of your prose!

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Re: Official ATAR Notes ‘Post Your Poetry’ Thread
« Reply #22 on: January 27, 2019, 04:27:28 pm »
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Poems written between 2011 and 2016: ~950.
Poems written since 2016: ~5.

Haha. :(
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Re: Official ATAR Notes ‘Post Your Poetry’ Thread
« Reply #23 on: January 29, 2019, 02:58:29 pm »
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After reading this, I had to say it was simply sublime. I felt it was almost ethereal, the way you portrayed this metaphorical poetry. I loved reading the meaning behind it, and also using poetry to express what we can't in any other way is something I resonate with. Reading it gave me a sense of inner peace and I thank you for sharing your beautiful talent, please do share more of your prose!

Thank you so much! I'll definitely post more before exams kick in xD

On a side note, and just to start general discussion for the poets out there, what is your favourite style of poetry to write and to read?
I personally love writing poems that follow a rhyming pattern because it challenges me to convey my thoughts within a certain number of syllables and following a certain rhythm. I do also however love limericks and prose poetry ^_^
In terms of reading, I like long prose. Especially metaphorical/modernist poetry, because it's interesting to interpret and visualise.
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Re: Official ATAR Notes ‘Post Your Poetry’ Thread
« Reply #24 on: January 29, 2019, 06:07:53 pm »
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Thank you so much! I'll definitely post more before exams kick in xD

Please do!! My poetry is typically free verse, although occasionally they may be haikus or sonnets too and I love prose as well. Also, I enjoy using rhyme as well, because like you said, it becomes a challenge to express my thoughts in an articulate manner with a rhyming pattern. Honestly, I love reading any form of poetry. I think this beautiful article sums up why perfectly :)

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Re: Official ATAR Notes ‘Post Your Poetry’ Thread
« Reply #25 on: January 29, 2019, 06:16:50 pm »
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Poems written between 2011 and 2016: ~950.
Poems written since 2016: ~5.

Haha. :(
Sounds like it's time for an accountability thread ;)
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Re: Official ATAR Notes ‘Post Your Poetry’ Thread
« Reply #26 on: January 30, 2019, 12:33:59 pm »
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Sounds like it's time for an accountability thread ;)

My daily sketching one is going super well, so I don't see why a poetry one wouldn't! Haha.
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Re: Official ATAR Notes ‘Post Your Poetry’ Thread
« Reply #27 on: February 13, 2019, 06:02:39 pm »
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Oops, this is a bit of a long one.

Even after the earth is no more than dust
And the stars we have wished upon have disappeared
Into a well of blackness
Do you remember the times we had together
Filling each other’s minds
With thoughts I wish to have forever.

I hope
When you are gone
Faraway, distant, in another world,
You look back just once,
Remember the face that loved you so much
And even loves you now.
Look back at the memories
We had
Of us
When we were happy.

I close my eyes
And wonder
Where are you now?
What are you doing?
Are you alive? Are you dead?
I will never know
Because you are a million lifetimes away
Far away from the reach of my hand,
Too far, I cannot reach-
I stumble forward,
The image of you is gone
As I gaze into the blackness
Of reality.
I do not want this-
But you are gone.
Forever.

I will remember you.
Will you remember me?
𝘉𝘦 𝘧𝘦𝘢𝘳𝘭𝘦𝘴𝘴 𝘪𝘯 𝘵𝘩𝘦 𝘱𝘶𝘳𝘴𝘶𝘪𝘵 𝘰𝘧 𝘸𝘩𝘢𝘵 𝘴𝘦𝘵𝘴 𝘺𝘰𝘶𝘳 𝘴𝘰𝘶𝘭 𝘰𝘯 𝘧𝘪𝘳𝘦.

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Re: Official ATAR Notes ‘Post Your Poetry’ Thread
« Reply #28 on: February 25, 2019, 02:29:54 pm »
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For my Extension 2 Major Project

I'm so sorry for your-
                    I'm at a-
                                     loss.

I can't imagine how you-
                         I cannot-
                                         feel.

If there's anything
                             you-
                                (I   need   her back)
                                              - let me know.

She was-
Don't say was
              - a fine girl.
She is.
She
Is
               
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Re: Official ATAR Notes ‘Post Your Poetry’ Thread
« Reply #29 on: June 22, 2019, 08:16:09 am »
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For my Extension 2 Major Project

I'm so sorry for your-
                    I'm at a-
                                     loss.

I can't imagine how you-
                         I cannot-
                                         feel.

If there's anything
                             you-
                                (I   need   her back)
                                              - let me know.

She was-
Don't say was
              - a fine girl.
She is.
She
Is
             

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