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Re: English Standard Question Thread
« Reply #720 on: January 22, 2020, 11:51:46 am »
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If I was to write body paras about these themes, how would I link it back to the "giving new insights" part. A better way to phrase this is, say, if I was writing about how Billy goes against everything and pursue his passion, what would be the insight that this gives the audiences about anomalies in human behaviours and motivations?

Hey, again!

You would always link back to the "giving new insights" part at the end of your paragraphs. This is what people call the "link" sentence in PEEL or PETAL bodies where you wrap it all up and inform the marker how the theme has provided you with a new outlook on "anomalies in human behaviours and motivations." If we use the example you proposed, Billy's rejection of the status quo can give us insight into how passion, while it may isolate an individual from what they have always known, can generate anomalous behaviours like Billy's gravitation towards ballet but how it is worth embracing. Here, you'd say that this insight encourages audiences to similarly find confidence to pursue what motivates them even if it means defying expectations. Hope that helps!

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Re: English Standard Question Thread
« Reply #721 on: January 23, 2020, 01:11:57 pm »
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How should I practise for writing creatively since this has always been one of my weaknesses?
the problem I have is that my creative pieces are usually pretty cliche and the vocab I use is not really interesting (I'm not so good at show not tell)

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Re: English Standard Question Thread
« Reply #722 on: January 23, 2020, 10:34:53 pm »
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Hey, again!

You would always link back to the "giving new insights" part at the end of your paragraphs. This is what people call the "link" sentence in PEEL or PETAL bodies where you wrap it all up and inform the marker how the theme has provided you with a new outlook on "anomalies in human behaviours and motivations." If we use the example you proposed, Billy's rejection of the status quo can give us insight into how passion, while it may isolate an individual from what they have always known, can generate anomalous behaviours like Billy's gravitation towards ballet but how it is worth embracing. Here, you'd say that this insight encourages audiences to similarly find confidence to pursue what motivates them even if it means defying expectations. Hope that helps!

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Hi Angelina,
just have some questions. If I decide to write about relationships that Billy forms along the way like with Michael, and propose an idea that even though anomalous behaviours can isolate you from the majority of the surroundings, it brings new understandings regarding the benefits of being different - being able to form valuable friendships and relationships. Do you think that still answers the question or is it a lil bit off coz I feel like the question is specifically looking for a new insight INTO the anomalies in behaviours and motivations.

If not, how can I slightly modify my idea so that the relationship theme fits into the question?

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Re: English Standard Question Thread
« Reply #723 on: January 24, 2020, 10:46:03 am »
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Hi Angelina,
just have some questions. If I decide to write about relationships that Billy forms along the way like with Michael, and propose an idea that even though anomalous behaviours can isolate you from the majority of the surroundings, it brings new understandings regarding the benefits of being different - being able to form valuable friendships and relationships. Do you think that still answers the question or is it a lil bit off coz I feel like the question is specifically looking for a new insight INTO the anomalies in behaviours and motivations.

If not, how can I slightly modify my idea so that the relationship theme fits into the question?

Cheers

Hey!

I think your argument is totally fine for relationships. You can just add on in the linking sentence that this in turn provides us with an insight into how aligning ourselves with those who share our motivations and behaviours will enable us to create lasting and rewarding relationships. It doesn't stray from the question at all!

How should I practise for writing creatively since this has always been one of my weaknesses?
the problem I have is that my creative pieces are usually pretty cliche and the vocab I use is not really interesting (I'm not so good at show not tell)

There's some great advice from kauac and myself in this thread here for creative writing which you might like to consider! If you find that your stories are too cliche, try and approach them from a different angle. An example could be writing a story where everything is a dream or hallucination; this is a total no no in English. However, you could have the same story idea and take it in a different direction, perhaps having the reader question the reliability of the character and being forced to determine where the line of fact and fiction is drawn. This article does a really good job at outlining some major writing cliches and ways you can avoid them!

As for show, don't tell, I always suggest asking yourself if you could say it in a way that would imply it instead. For example, if I were to take "Susie was cold", I could show it in three other ways. Through her actions, I could say "Susie wrapped a scarf tightly around her neck like a boa constrictor." Through dialogue, I could have "Susie commented, 'It's a bit chilly outside, isn't it?'" Lastly, through setting, I could show how "The room's air was spinning from the air conditioner. Susie stood shivering underneath it." This way, I'm not saying she's cold, but I'm showing it instead through her experiences. Every time you read a sentence when you're editing the creative, see if you have "show" something instead and have the reader make the inference themselves  :)

Hope that helps!

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Re: English Standard Question Thread
« Reply #724 on: January 28, 2020, 01:49:00 pm »
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how should I mark my own essay before I submit every time? I feel like that's what I actually should do when I reread my essay after I write it but what are some of the things I should be looking for when I reread it. Now what I really do s just read through it and don't know what works and what doesn't

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Re: English Standard Question Thread
« Reply #725 on: January 28, 2020, 02:10:11 pm »
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how should I mark my own essay before I submit every time? I feel like that's what I actually should do when I reread my essay after I write it but what are some of the things I should be looking for when I reread it. Now what I really do s just read through it and don't know what works and what doesn't

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The first thing I always look for when I'm going over a draft for the first time is for spelling, grammar and punctuation. These are little errors that you can correct easily with Grammarly or any other spell-checking software. Even if you might think everything is looking great, it's always good to check over your work carefully in case there's a sneaky typo that you hadn't realised you made while you were writing the essay  :)

The key questions you can ask yourself from there should be as follows;
  • Am I answering the essay question in my thesis? Have I used the relevant concepts and terminology to show this in my overall response?
  • Does my essay have two/three distinct bodies with arguments that contribute to my thesis?
  • Do I have substantial textual evidence (techniques) to support my arguments?
  • Have I linked back to the question each time? How could I do this more effectively if I haven't?
  • Are there any awkward words or phrases in my essay? How might I rewrite them to make the essay flow and sound better?
  • Can I realistically write this under exam conditions? Is there anything else I should add and/or remove to ensure that I am putting my best work forward?

Another really good tip I could offer is to copy your essay into a Read Aloud software. Hearing your essay being read by someone else can help you better identify any areas of the essay that might need improvement and further revision. You can also make comments on your own work like "I feel like this sentence could be better worded. What do you think?" If you do all of this, it'll make the feedback process for your teacher/s much easier! Hope this helps!

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