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September 15, 2019, 05:50:27 pm

Author Topic: Hey can someone provide me with some feed back on my short response :D  (Read 322 times)  Share 

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Assess the legal response on one contemporary human rights issue. (7mark)
thank you!
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Re: Hey can someone provide me with some feed back on my short response :D
« Reply #1 on: November 17, 2018, 10:42:40 am »
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Hi!

I don't have much to say about this as I think your response is already amazing! You've provided a ton of relevant examples which back up your argument. I've pointed out a few expression issues which kinda disrupt the flow of your writing, but other than that, there's not really much I can comment on.
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Re: Hey can someone provide me with some feed back on my short response :D
« Reply #2 on: November 17, 2018, 11:57:37 am »
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Thank you!!
but i feel like i am lacking some domestic legal response, some of my friends are telling me to put in cases, but finding case in south Sudan is quite hard to do 

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Re: Hey can someone provide me with some feed back on my short response :D
« Reply #3 on: November 17, 2018, 03:26:41 pm »
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Thank you!!
but i feel like i am lacking some domestic legal response, some of my friends are telling me to put in cases, but finding case in south Sudan is quite hard to do 

No worries, my pleasure!

With human rights I didnít really use domestic legislation. I donít think you need a lot of it (if any) to get full marks :-) Donít worry too much about what your friends say lol
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