This piece was pretty interesting to write, but I feel like my method of language analysis might be very formulaic. As in, I only included the contention sort of in the very last line of both paragraphs, but I feel like if I include it in the middle as well, it will become too repetitive. Is there a way to avoid doing this? Also any other feedback is very welcome
Shorten emphasizes the disappointing result of the budget in his speech by building up the tension through exaggerated and repeated emphasis on the effort undertaken to create it. This is particularly exemplified through the great dichotomy between 7 months of planning, and the degeneration of the budget in ‘less than 48 hours’. Shorten elucidates this notion by grouping ‘this budget, this Prime Minister, and this government’ together in an attempt to funnel the public’s criticism regarding the budget onto the associated party as well. To this end, the Liberals is depicted as incompetent for failing to produce an acceptable budget plan despite the length of time available, suggesting a needless waste of both the taxpayer’s money and their efforts. Hence, the Labour Party appears more favourable as a result.
Furthermore, Shorten appeals to the wider public, particularly those who are family minded, as he juxtaposes the effect of the budget upon a ‘working mum’, to that of upon a millionaire who is not in need of money. The former figure is one of a disadvantaged member of society who has given much to their community, and thus the speaker attempts to elicit outrage at this injustice from readers, given that they are not compensated fairly for their contributions by the government. It is intimated that the reason the Treasurer ‘didn’t want to talk about ‘winners’ and ‘losers’’ is because they are trying to avoiding acknowledging this injustice, thereby hiding their guilt which only serves to further their apparent dishonesty concerning the benefits of the budget. This portrays the labour party as ostensibly one who does not cater to the needs of its people, exacerbated by the cuts to incredibly vital services such as schools and hospitals that ‘people rely on’. Accordingly, Shorten sways the public to seek other alternatives, namely the Labour Party, for the other’s blatant shirking of responsibilities.