The process of discovery involves uncovering what is hidden and reconsidering what is known.Discovery serves as a mechanism to challenge an individual’s preconceived beliefs. Only after reconsideration of such ideas, is an individual able to uncover their true values, previously hidden. Such realisations are intensely meaningful, as one gains renewed perceptions.
Good start! I think conceptually it works, and it links to the question well. Perhaps some more extrapolation on exactly what beliefs are challenged? This notion is seen through Shakespeare’s the Tempest and Mark Twain’s The Adventures of Huckleberry Finn. Initial views regarding social hierarchy and freedom respectively, are challenged, thus leading to a renewal of one’s thoughts. Both texts emulate that it is the process of discovering that drives an individual’s search for new meanings.
Great introduction; texts are linked to the idea nicely without any retell, and I feel ready to dive into your essay. Awesome 
Both texts explore the change in significance of social hierarchy to the individual as its meaning is redefined as a result a discovery.
This would work better as a second sentence - In the AOS, I find it works better to start with a conceptual statement without mentioning the text. Quick not so good example that sort of links to this paragraph, Significant discoveries alter individuals perceptions of the society they live in." In the Tempest, hierarchal structures dictated by Jacobean values are contested, inner discovery resulting in recognition of the flaws in such system. Boatswain’s assertions serve as a catalyst to Gonzalo’s recognition to preconceived notions of power, “make the rope of his destiny our cable.” The metaphor outlines Gonzalo has recognised that the Boatswain is the ‘master’ of the ship.
But what does it show the audience about Discovery in general? Try to step away from the text and characters. Gonzalo is able to identify the futility of the nobility’s power against the face of nature, his trust in the Boatswain’s abilities undermining the absolute authority of the upper class.
Retell. Thus as social hierarchy shaped by Jacobean values is contested, Gonzalo’s discovery enabling him to uncover the flaws in such system.
Retell. Shakespeare crafts Gonzalo to describe his Utopian world, “I’ th’ commonwealth”, his kingdom would have “no name of magistrate…no sovereignty.” The use of anaphora of “no”, emphasises his recognition of the flaws of the hierarchal structures he has left behind. He recognises this creates the tensions and divisions within society, implicitly suggesting its futility through exclusion of order in his utopian realm.
Still focusing a lot on the characters - You need to go bigger. What does the AUDIENCE learn from the use of these techniques. Thus, the composer exemplifies, that discoveries enable the individual to uncover the true significance of societal values regarding hierarchy following reconsideration of initial preconceptions.
Great conceptual basis and some good textual reference, but definitely too text focused. If you take away the retell and the explanation, you've really only provided two techniques!Similarly, in Twain’s novel, Huck’s belief in the inferiority of African Americans is contested as a result of his inner discovery, unveiling his true mentality towards Southern American hierarchy.
Nice transition into the new text. Huck’s initial opinion of African American inferiority reflect societal preconceptions. First person perspective outlines Huck’s true attitudes, shaped by Southern racism, “It was fifteen minutes before I could work myself up to go and humble myself to a nigger.”
What does this reveal to the audience though? You are telling me how techniques reveal Discovery concepts in the text, I want to know what they tell me about Discovery in general. Twain’s use of tautology exemplifies Huck’s reluctance to have to apologise to an African American, based on society’s hierarchy which dictate ‘White’ Americans to be superior. Huck’s discovery of runaway slave Jim’s character through their growing friendship catalyses his epiphany of the irrationality of the social hierarchy instilled into him.
Try not to use plot elements as examples - Always techniques or elements of form! “White” is used as a motif for the white supremacist views deeming ‘white’ men to be superior on the foundation of their skin colour. By calling Jim, a slave, ‘white’, by explicitly stating Jim held the capacity to be as honourable as ‘White’ Americans, Huck’s defiance represents his exposure to the absurdity of such system founded by a lack of morality.
Thus showing the audience _____. Thus, through both texts it is evident that discoveries result in a gradual renewed perceptions, following reconsideration of preconceived perceptions regarding social hierarchy.
The texts explore the transformation in the meaning of freedom as a result of the renewal of perceptions offered through discovery. In the Tempest, Prospero is crafted to reassess his pursuit for revenge as equating to an achievement of freedom.
Retell. Shakespeare crafts Prospero to create an imaginary realm through the masque to stress the discrepancy between the imaginary and reality.
What sort of techniques/traits are you talking about specifically here? The connotation of “sweet nymphs” establishes an enchanting scene, the imagery of perfection furthered through Ferdinand’s awe, “harmonious, charmingly”, the use of assonance placing emphasis on the state of social harmony.
Nice analysis here! Again though, what is its purpose? Prospero recognises the juxtaposition between the two worlds, “we are such stuff as dreams are made on.”
Retell. Through the symbolism of “dreams”, the composer has crafted Prospero’s recognition that one inadvertently chooses to fantasise their devout wishes. However, he sees that only the individual has the capacity to determine their implication.
Don't tell me that the character realises this - SHOW me how Shakespeare has communicated this TO US. His return to reality characterised by emotional affliction is established through aural imagery, “a strange hollow and confused noise” breaking the masque. This portrays his pain of disillusionment, and his sense of his failure of total control causing him to recognise the paradoxically liberating yet enslaving nature for his pursuit for revenge. Thus, this leads to his climatic comprehension of forgiveness as an alternative route to freeing oneself.
Some fantastic analysis/concepts in here, but some of it is retell. Some is REALLY close to what you need, but still focusing on what the characters discover, not what we are taught. You could literally change "his" to "we" or something like that and it would improve immensely - All about subtleties.Similarly in the Adventures of Huckleberry Finn, Twain crafts Huck to undergo an inner discovery to review his simplistic vision of freedom.
Again, a focus on the plot here - Try to keep things abstract. His initial comprehension of freedom consist of a living dictated by his own rules. The composer reveals this through the use of first person, revealing Huck’s inner thoughts of Miss Watson, “she kept pecking at me, and it got tiresome and lonesome.” His emotionally afflicted state is emphasised through rhyme and the characterisation of Miss Watson, “pecking” indicating constant verbal abuse towards Huck.
Still character focused here. However, Huck’s intellectual epiphany causes him to identify freedom as isolation society as he identifies the hypocrisy of the world. The composer’s choice for Huck to have “tore it (letter) up,” symbolises his rejection of society’s values and the true break from the world around him.
Thus showing the audience _______ about Discovery. He recognises the absurdity of society’s principles following his realisation Jim will be demeaned to a slave upon returning back to society.
Retell. His expression to “light out” is a metaphorical device Twain utilises to outline his desire to escape society. Huck recognises his sense of freedom lies in escaping reformation to illogical societal rules, the metaphor alluding to finding his true values through detachment from society. Therefore, Huck’s inner discovery leads to the development of his intellect, leading him to uncover what freedom really means to him.
Thus, discoveries are often intensely meaningful as the individual is often gifted with renewed perceptions that uncover their conscience towards social hierarchy and freedom. In both texts, it is highlighted this transformation can only be attained through reconsideration of preconceived beliefs.
A tiny bit more in this conclusion would be beneficial - Try recapping the sorts of concepts that have come through in your analysis above. 
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