That the Australian wide NAPLAN gives an accurate measure of learning and education quality is met with equally widespread doubt. Dan Hogan’s opinion piece in The Guardian (n.d.) contends that the use of NAPLAN is “crude and arbitrary”. His authoritative and declarative tone is directed members of the education industry, namely teachers students and parents as well as towards the various state and Federal governments. This is also reflected in its formal and informative style. There is the underlying intention of Hogan to have his audience convert to a different writing enrichment approach, however he attempts to avoid too much affirmation of his position of authority to avoid marring his piece with the semblance of bias as he is a teacher.
Hogan’s intention to be clear and concise in order to avoid confusion in what is considered a complex issue is reflected the statement of contention at the very beginning. By introducing the contention that NAPLAN is “crude and arbitrary” Hogan avoids this message being lost in the jargon and myriad arguments he presents. This is meant to ensure that his audience can read the piece with clarity and avoids putting potential readers off through vagueness or convoluted points. Interestingly the ‘we’ doesn’t intend to include the reader but instead present a united front of teachers to the reader, in order to make the teachers’ contention more appealing as well as establish the expertise of Hogan as a teacher. He uses his stake in the issue to present himself as knowledgeable without emphasising his career. He avoids this as to prevent the appearance of bias.
In order the counterbalance the acceptance of the NAPLAN in Australian society Hogan attempts to legitimise his analysis of it. The antithetical statement of ‘anxieties high and results down’ further intends to justify his choice of topic by portraying the NAPLAN as currently ineffective, painful and counterintuitive, which is unappealing on a personal level to the reader as it appeals to the notion of time is money. This is then reinforced by the appeal to logic the secedes it, as by arguing that ‘it is fair to question’ the NAPLAN, Hogan implies to the audience that there are already substantial flaws.
There is a juxtaposition between the varying experts by acknowledging “NESA, ACARA and the NSW Department of Education’ yet portraying them as inferior to “Les Perelman’ and the “NSW Teachers Federation” by using words such as “leading” and “academic” to elevate Perelman to a more authoritative status. This juxtaposition is framed to argue that there is change happening to the NAPLAN system and that change is positive. It also preemptively rebuts potential objections of NAPLAN being a tried and true system, whilst supporting Hogan’s contention that NAPLAN is crude and uninformative with expert opinion. Additionally, he draws on the metaphor that “students [are] in the dark” which attempts to engage the audience as well as acting as a hyperbole to make the situation seem dire. Hogan later draws on a similar metaphor of “casting shade” and the repetition of this light and dark motif not only help create a visual image in the readers’ minds but also play into the connotations of light and dark with good and bad, subtly reinforcing the author’s position.
Hogan attacks the NAPLAN system, accusing it of being too data based and formulaic. Hogan repeats the words ‘essay’, ‘test’ and ‘data’, particularly in the sentence ‘time and resources analysing of results…data… tests and data’ which intends to create a atmosphere around NAPLAN that it is bureaucratic and uninspired, which is unappealing to the reader. This is supported by the loaded language used that feeds into a negative image of NAPLAN, including ‘pedagogical’, ‘inflicted’, ‘cynical’ and ‘bare bones fact’. This intends to have the reader conclude that the NAPLAN system is ineffective.
This attack is sustained by the accompanying visual. The centralising of the children gives the impression that they should come first, however the similar colour palette, as so the children almost blend into their surroundings, amplifies the notion that they are being forgotten and left behind by the NAPLAN system. The pigtails of one of the children, a traditional happy-go-lucky motif of innocent girls, fosters the image that the students submitted to the NAPLAN are unfairly treated by the system.
Beginning his argument regarding the foolishness of keeping NAPLAN while there are better options with a cliche, Hogan is adopting an almost mocking tone. The concept that this new paradigm will be ‘music to educator’s ears’ lays the impression that where the potential system is melodious in nature, the current system is distinctly unimpressive, which attempts to align the reader with the view that a new system should be adopted. referring back to ‘evidence -based’ information gives the author some credence in suggesting an alternative. There is also a denigration of the present system with negatively connotated lexemes of ‘time heavy’ and ‘lurch being associated with it, while a proposed system is described as ‘rich’.
To conclude his argument, Hogan emphasises his position of authority by the use of jargon, notably ‘writing construct’ that imply to the reader that all that he is saying and has said can be trusted as he is a person with expertise. This is accompanied by additional in depth knowledge, which the audience is unlikely to be aware of further attempts to establish him as a trusted figure.
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