Biology Student Experiment

[s110820]

Hi,

I was just wondering if anyone could give me feedback for my biology student experiment? It's due in 11 days, but I would extremely appreciate any feedback.

Thank you

[Bri MT]

Hey,

I think the main thing for you to work on is being careful with your language choices so that you work has more clarity and is continually accurate. Mostly, you seem to have a good grasp of the concepts but struggle with communicating them, I think this largely comes from practice and learning to critically read your own work (which can be very hard). You might also find it useful to try talking to people (or even talking into your phone or at a pet) about what you're learning just to practice getting it into words.

Hope this helps

[s110820]

Hi Bri,

I am so sorry but I just realised that I attached an early draft version of my assignment. I have attached the actual version to the thread.

Sincere apologies,

S110820

[Bri MT]

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It's alright, mistakes happen.


Ok feedback speed run:

- Can definitely see improvements
- Where I've put just a dot comment it's to highlight an issue for you to think about - check the other feedback I wrote as much of i refers to something I discussed there