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VCE Stuff => VCE Subjects + Help => VCE English Studies => Topic started by: Maheskutty on September 10, 2019, 09:45:02 pm
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Can someone edit my Ransom and Invictus paragraph :D
'Forgiveness can correct any miscarriage of justice committed.' Compare how this idea demonstrated in these texts.
Eastwood’s Invictus demonstrates the societal expectations can result in individual leaders to be discouraged by their own abilities. This is evident how Mandela’s release from prison is constrained by others especially in the beginning how the white South African coach claims that “this is the day our country went to the dogs” which exemplifies the misconceived idea which the coach in itself represents to display the animosity prompting others to believe in the assumption. However, Mandela seeks for reconciliation in a post-apartheid era and believes that “forgiveness liberates the soul” thus conveying that he quests to “surprise them with restrain, with compassion, with generosity”. Likewise, Malouf’s Ransom, Priam’s unfortunate circumstance of losing his son Hector initially enlightens Priam a sense of wrath however the vengeance he attempts to take on Achilles creates a sense of futility. Thus, Priam himself presents himself as a “plain, white haired man” to recognise common humanity rather than hostility. Both with contrasting views, Eastwood focuses more on the restricting nature of others that ultimately inhibits an individual including Mandela’s inability to prompt forgiveness due to the expectations of others whereas Malouf suggests that forgiveness is achieved by presenting oneself as ordinary to attain the mutual understanding as well as the humble request for the retrieval of Hector’s body.
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I've attached a commented version of your paragraph. I'm not sure if this is intended for an introduction. Make sure that you keep your discussion relevant to the prompt. The use of the word "any" is worth considering.