Compare how Tirra Lirra by the River and Tennyson’s poetry explore truth and happiness.Truth and happiness are
complimentary I'm assuming you mean complEmentary, as in, they go together, rather than complimentary which implies that they give compliments to and say nice things about each other 
concepts which allow an author to implement into their text an exploration of related values. Alfred Tennyson’s poetry, specifically “In Memoriam”, “The Lady of Shallot” and “Tears, Idle Tears”, and Jessica Anderson’s prose fiction novel, Tirra Lirra by the River,
published in 1978 are they all published in this year?, are dissimilar in terms of context but share a
complimentary see above examination of the meaning and influence of truth and happiness. In spite of the contrasting societal expectations of the divergent Victorian era and the 20th Century, the motive of relaying these societal assumptions that the authors have conveyed is highly similar and eminently influences Tennyson and Anderson’s overall messages. As a result, the disheartening nature of both plots is overwrought by the principal concept being portrayed;
the truthful process the main characters must undertake in order to achieve ultimate happiness. This isn't really a 'concept,' and how is it that a process can be truthful, exactly? Your expression and flow is awesome, but the content of this sentence is making me ask some questions, and you don't want your assessor to be able to ask questions of your essay. This search for happiness and truth is portrayed in the texts through
the negative impact that the contextual gender roles had on the happiness of their female characters and their ability to find truth, as well as the power of subjective memories that allow a person to overcome their grief and achieve true happinessthis is list-y. It's not quite as obvious since you've only got two body paragraphs instead of three, but having this one-for-one correspondence between sentences in your introduction and topic sentences for your body paragraphs isn't a great idea as it can become quite repetitive, and many assessors regard it as filler..
Most prominently, both Tennyson and Anderson explore what is true and what is false by drawing from the context of their own societies to highlight the negative impact which immoral gender roles play on the happiness of their women. In Tirra Lirra by the River, the societal context of Australia and England during two time periods,
the present (1970s) present?? This is more than 40 years in the past!? The 1970s are closer to the 1940's than they are to the present day. Also, try not to use brackets in formal essays - embed the information in your sentences instead. and the past (post war 1940s) is critical to the progression of the novel’s plot. The chronological proximity of these time frames enables the readers to identify the differences and advancements that were made in each society’s context, allowing the readers to identify the shift in gender roles and their effect on the authentic happiness of women. Anderson’s characterization of Nora represents her as a complex, nuanced and sophisticated woman, having a sensitive and artistic temperament,
should be a semicolon here entirely the opposite of what a stereotypical woman should have reflected in the 1940s. Nora’s awareness of her disparate personality
is conveyed through, “I was a backward and innocent girl, living in a backward and unworldly place” this quote isn't integrated. See above feedback for supercooper for an explanation of how to go about achieving this. Anderson’s use of the main character’s self-monologue declares her authenticity and truthfulness through an explanation of her unusual outlook on life for a female, enabling the realisation that it would have an unfavourable consequence on her overall happiness. Arbitrary gender roles, shown through the high modality of
the declarative statement claimed by Colin, Colin's declaration that “no wife of mine is going to work”, emphasises the dominating role of men and the elimination of women in the workplace during the post WWII era.
Quoting Nora, “Colin won’t let me”, needs to be integrated expresses the forced declination of Nora’s job offer
through the use of diction which creates a persuasive effect huh? 
Diction has to do with pronunciation, and I'm not quite sure what's persuasive about this(?), further reinforcing the gender restrictions that she is under and the lack of choice
that represses her pure happiness wat represents her pure happiness? Her lack of choice? The end of this sentence is a bit unclear. Similarly, Tennyson has displayed specific duties of women in his famous poem, “The Lady of Shalott”, by creating an allegory which acts as his case against established gender roles in the Victorian era. The use of iambic tetrameter
by Tennyson we already know it's by him, you don't have to over-introduce things creates a sense of urgency and thus, truthfulness, for the readers in a way not possible for Anderson in her novelistic form. The lady of Shalott, for example, is confined by “four gray walls and four gray towers”, this imagery demonstrating the lack of freedom that a woman had through the metaphor of imprisonment.
The statement that follows, “overlook a space of flowers”, integration juxtaposes the previous line by showing the lifelessness of the tower versus the vibrancy of the nature of Camelot
; a dark tone which signifies the lady of Shalott’s genuine depressing are you trying to say that the emotions she feels depresses the audience, or that she feels depression, because at the moment, you're saying the former emotions due to the way she has to live. this isn't grammatical; if you're using a semicolon, then the stuff on either side of the semicolon has to be a self-contained sentence. (<--see?) But if I were to do something like this; it's very ungrammatical. <--that's because the first part isn't a sentence on its own. To take your example: 'a dark tone which signifies the lady of Shalott's genuine depressing emotions due to the way she has to live' - that's not a self-contained sentence, meaning the semicolon doesn't belong here. Try and just split this into its own sentence and change the wording a bit. This further reinforcement of Tennyson’s view that women were restricted to certain positions in their life, mirrors Anderson’s representation of Nora, which although more subtle, presents a similar restriction. Furthermore,
accurate social standards included being married expression is a bit clunky here and I'm not sure what you mean by 'accurate social standards' ...as opposed to inaccurate ones? and this
is conveyed through, “she hath no loyal knight and true” integration. The use of the word “knight” characterizes a man in the Victorian era to be of high standards and thus
the fact that “she hath no knight”
proposes implies that a woman is lacking if she is not married, again, strengthening Tennyson’s point through his own poetic method. Through Anderson and Tennyson’s societal context, degrading gender roles have successfully been portrayed to convey the negative
connotation effect that
it has they have on a female’s happiness and ability to have trust in society.
^link?-->Memories are subjective, and therefore untrue, in nature, and thus allow a person to escape their grief to achieve happiness and learn the truth about their past. Tirra Lirra by the River’s Nora, for example, successfully
portrays you're using this word quite a bit, so this'd be a good one to find synonyms for to help you during test conditions when you want to avoid repetition the capabilities of selective memories in the process of conquering sadness and self-realisation, and shows her bias towards her past experiences from the beginning of the novel. Anderson refers to Nora’s memories through the metaphor
of a “globe of memory”, indicating her abundance of memories and knowledgeable truth. how? What's the connection between this evidence and your idea? “I have been careful not to let this globe spin to expose the nether side” represents her high selectivity integration of the things she wants to remember
due to a “nether side” existing <--this is well integrated!!! See how it fits the context of the sentence, and that if we took away the quotation marks, it'd still make sense? More of this!!!, indicating that she has a poor past due to the political and economic context of the post WW2 time that essentially caused her the pain that she does not want to revisit, as forgetting about certain things will help her on her journey to recovery. Despite her preference to not remember her troubled background,
“I don’t mind the fact that she doesn't mind "inspecting some of the dark patches…” signifies her desire to end her misery by seeking out the truth, as the difficulties that the war brought into her life is now over. The use of foreshadowing and ellipses constitutes a dramatic pause allowing the readers to anticipate what truth Nora knows about her past to cause her heartache. The high modality present in,
“only I like to manipulate the globe myself” integration emphasises the strong bias behind her recollections that is required for her rehabilitation and therefore her happiness
what's the link between this evidence and this interpretation? Take me with you on your train of thought, and try to spell out your logic step by step, as this is where many of the marks are. Simply saying 'this evidence emphasises/demonstrates/portrays this idea' isn't really sufficient.. Anderson gives her protagonist the ability to escape through memory in an attempt to find happiness as a coping mechanism due to the WW2 that occurred during Nora’s youth, which brought about many of the hardships she would face in her later years. Likewise, Tennyson has created a theme of
the pleasing pain of remembering the past not sure what you're referring to here, but the linking between texts is good in both “Tears, Idle Tears” and “In Memoriam”. In spite of the pain that the protagonist feels in “Tears, Idle Tears” due to the
factual ? death of his loved one, remembering her truthfully provides comfort in Tennyson’s poem. The Victorian era consisted of mourning rituals that epitomised the time in which an individual would pass away, and thus the importance of the memories that the protagonist obtains of his loved one that help him in his grieving has been expressed by Tennyson to communicate this significant truth.
“Fresh as the first beam glittering on a sail, That brings our friends up from the underworld” integration creates imagery of a
‘sail’ coming into view, proclaiming his hope of his “friends” it seems like when you use shorter quotes, you're able to integrate them properly, so maybe force yourself to quote shorter excerpts more often as a means of providing evidence, rather that having chunks of sentences that just sit there and don't grammatically belong in your discussion, actually referring to memories, coming back from the
dead (“underworld”
).
The assonance and sibilance in “so sad, so fresh” adds to the contemporary mourning effect but HOW and WHY does this evidence support this assertion? of the Victorian context and
“fresh” employs foreshadowing, does it? What is it foreshadowing, exactly? which insinuates that something happened recently, contrasting with the title, “tears, idle tears” which suggests, much like Nora, that the persona has experienced prolonged grief as opposed to a recent sad memory. This suggests that he is subconsciously revisiting the old memories as a coping mechanism to his grieving; promoting Tennyson’s idea of the important role that remembering has
on for recovery and true happiness. As the title “In Memoriam” connotes, Tennyson composed this poem to remember the death of his beloved friend as a coping mechanism in the process of mourning.
The repetition of the “l” creates alliteration in “here in the long unlovely street” two instances of a letter doesn't always equal repetition, and I don't think this is the strongest evidence you could be using. What else is this evidence doing - what other language in this poem is contributing to meaning? and suggests a protracted period of time spent on the “unlovely street”, a symbol of the distressing memories that he has confronted in order to lament the absence of his friend, which proved to be arduous for Tennyson due to his surrounding community that restricted his expressing of emotions. The truthfully loving memories that he has been left with is represented through the
emotive language avoid this phrase unless you intend to immediately get more specific about which emotions are being evoked in “such precious relics brought by thee”, implying that these memories he has selected will allow his true happiness. Anaphora is applied in “ring out, wild bells, to the wild sky,…ring out, wild bells, and let him die”, the phrase “ring out” drawing an image of a bell ‘ringing’ away the troubles that the old year brought, symbolizing the effect of recalling
factual memories of his friend which frees the negative spirit to bring about a positive influence okay, you've lost me here? What is the significance of this evidence? Your discussion is getting a bit confusing, and thus sustaining Tennyson’s theory of the importance of remembering specific characteristics of an individual in order to
bemoan perhaps it's because I'm not entirely sure what this paragraph is arguing, but I don't think this is the right word here them in context of the Victorian era where being in agony during a death was crucial. As a result, the relevance of a person’s bias perceptions in order to secure happiness through truthful experiences has been skillfully conveyed by Anderson and Tennyson.
Resultantly, Alfred Tennyson’s poetry and Jessica Anderson’s prose-fiction novel,
Tirra Lirra by the River, no need to restate the title if you've already introduced it earlier and have been exploring it in detail adroitly execute the concept of truth and happiness within their unique contexts. The strong analysis of the negative effect of discriminatory gender roles on each context’s female’s happiness and capability of trusting, and the ability of idiosyncratic memories to allow the overcoming of grief to attain genuine happiness, have favourably allowed the exploration of truth and happiness in each composer’s exclusive societal and political contexts,
consisting of the Victorian era, post WW2 1940s and the 1970s. listing isn't necessary here.
You're off to a good start with this discussion, but there are some little things holding you back.
The first and most apparent is your quote integration - you need to make the authors' language fit within your sentences; you can't just say "The author's use of this poetic device, as seen in "blah blah blah quote from the text" which portrays this idea." Instead, you want to select only the most relevant bits of the text and insert them into your analysis smoothly, as you have done with some of the one and two word quotes here. Try to minimise the amount of evidence you're needing to cite, and just prioritise the integration of quotes when structuring your sentences.
And on that note, be careful with the structure of your essay too. I know some teachers who wouldn't mind there being two body paragraphs, but others greatly prefer a minimum of three to ensure there's both depth and breadth in your ideas. If possible, try and find some way of splitting this to form three or four B.P.s, or just make sure you plan in advance to have a sufficiently broad discussion in future.
Only other point I'd like to make is in relation to spelling out your evidence - often you'd bring up an example from the text and state that it demonstrated or conveyed something, but the connection wasn't really clear. For instance:The high modality present in, “only I like to manipulate the globe myself” emphasises the strong bias behind her recollections that is required for her rehabilitation and therefore her happiness.
How is it that the high modality of that quote emphasises her biased recollections? You need to be more specific in terms of how and why certain evidence is suppirting your points. It's kind of like you're starting and ending in exactly the right places, but you just need to make that crucial mid-way point more obvious in order to get credit for your discussion.
To address your concerns, I think you've examined the prompt and the notions of truth and happiness sufficiently, though the two-pronged discussion does make your exploration feel a bit too narrow. I'm not too sure what you mean by needing to 'evaluate' though - are you talking about your capacity to make judgements about the connections and ideas in both texts? Perhaps this is just terminology your teacher uses to describe something else, so if I'm wrong, let me know and maybe I can explain whether or not you've 'evaluated' well. Sorry I can't be more help on that front.
There's a great basis for discussion here, though, and you really just have to iron out a few issues with the structure of your approach, and you should be all good! 
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