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Ethereal Lights

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AC Feedback
« on: March 23, 2018, 11:12:15 pm »
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Hi,

I have my analytical commentary SAC next week and my teacher hasn't been very useful in helping me prepare for it. I would really appreciate anyone having a look at it and giving me some feedback. The text was segments and comments from this blog post http://www.melbournegastronome.com/2011/02/australian-womens-weekly-childrens.html if that helps (its from the insight exam guide).

Thanks :)
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Re: AC Feedback
« Reply #1 on: March 25, 2018, 10:49:34 am »
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Quote from: Ethereal Lights on March 23, 2018, 11:12:15 pm
Hi,

I have my analytical commentary SAC next week and my teacher hasn't been very useful in helping me prepare for it. I would really appreciate anyone having a look at it and giving me some feedback. The text was segments and comments from this blog post http://www.melbournegastronome.com/2011/02/australian-womens-weekly-childrens.html if that helps (its from the insight exam guide).

Thanks :)
Hi Ethereal Lights!
This is a strong piece of work!! :)
Attached are my comments (mostly really minor) :)

Good luck for your SAC ! :)

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Re: AC Feedback
« Reply #2 on: March 25, 2018, 11:45:23 am »
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Thankyou so much! I really appreciate the feedback :). I was planning on doing another paragraph on cohesion but I just got lazy and stopped writing  ;D but i'll make sure to include one in the future
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Re: AC Feedback
« Reply #3 on: March 25, 2018, 12:43:32 pm »
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Quote from: Ethereal Lights on March 25, 2018, 11:45:23 am
Thankyou so much! I really appreciate the feedback :). I was planning on doing another paragraph on cohesion but I just got lazy and stopped writing  ;D but i'll make sure to include one in the future
Haha!!  ;D Totally fine!
But actually I've asked a question on the Eng Lang question thread about this, whether we can just have either cohesion or coherence and not the both if you're already analysing discourse features.
Let's see what response we get, and if that's fine, you're all good!
Because you've already got a coherence para, so yup! :)
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