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Title: Physics Research Investigation
Post by: jinx_58 on August 15, 2021, 02:38:59 pm

Greeting.

Attached is my Physics research investigation.

Please tell me where to improve (it's due tomorrow).

Thanks,
jinx_58

Title: Re: Physics Research Investigation
Post by: Bri MT on August 16, 2021, 11:31:27 am

Hey,

This may be too late but some quick points:

- you have a few grammar issues you could work on, maybe try running the report through Grammarly or similar?
- I think you could do a more explicit treatment of the equation/theory e.g. the equation tells you less force for same impulse over greater time (with reduced fatality being an assumed result)
- some of your claims are pretty confident and broad e.g. "This shows that airbags do prevent death"   the data you have is correlation and doesn't necessarily mean that there is causation or that this applies to all scenarios
- something can be highly relevant and not support your claim, your writing implies that more support = more relevant
- I thought that your conclusion was relatively strong and considered i.e. you wrote it well

Title: Re: Physics Research Investigation
Post by: jinx_58 on August 16, 2021, 06:41:39 pm

Thank you.

Although the feedback was a few hours late (I had to submit it by 8:30AM), I'll keep this in mind for next year.

Thanks again,
jinx_58

Title: Re: Physics Research Investigation
Post by: Bri MT on August 17, 2021, 05:19:50 pm

Quote from: jinx_58 on August 16, 2021, 06:41:39 pm

Thank you.

Although the feedback was a few hours late (I had to submit it by 8:30AM), I'll keep this in mind for next year.

Thanks again,
jinx_58

No worries!
Best of luck :D