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SarahEve

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Please help edit/give feedback on my personal essay! Much appreciated :)
« on: November 06, 2019, 09:26:14 pm »
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Hi!! Any notes would be appreciated! Thanks!

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Re: Please help edit/give feedback on my personal essay! Much appreciated :)
« Reply #1 on: November 07, 2019, 08:50:25 am »
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Quote from: SarahEve  on November 06, 2019, 09:26:14 pm
Hi!! Any notes would be appreciated! Thanks!

Hey

I thought it was quite engaging and thought-provoking. Just some minor expression errors like in the intro you have 'is' repeated twice, other than that I really enjoyed it (:
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Re: Please help edit/give feedback on my personal essay! Much appreciated :)
« Reply #2 on: November 07, 2019, 02:52:14 pm »
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Quote from: yourfriendlyneighbourhoodghost on November 07, 2019, 08:50:25 am
Hey

I thought it was quite engaging and thought-provoking. Just some minor expression errors like in the intro you have 'is' repeated twice, other than that I really enjoyed it (:

Thank you! Thanks for helping me with grammar :)
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