Discovery Creative Writing!!! HELP!

[rh1A]

Good evening all,
Attached is my AOS creative writing....I've highlighted the sentences that sound mega crap....
Also with the two speech marks on that line....i don't know how to say it...but somehow have the dialogue of the judge saying what crime she's committed and her sentence...
Feedback n suggestions would be soooo appreciated
Thanks v much,
Rhiannon

[rh1A]

Can someone plleeeaassee help me
i'm running out of time in a major way!!!!

[headsup]

Hey!!

Not sure I am much help. I think it is good however think it may jump a little bit much. If you can add some more context. What exactly is she convicted for??

However, I think that it is broad enough to allow for the scope of the question that could be asked. The main thing would be to try with past questions to make sure you can adapt to fit the questions...

Trust that helps!!

ATVVVB