1. What makes someone a survivor like Vladek?
To become a survivor, much like Vladek, an individual must have endured, and essentially have overcome such challenging experiences. The events that Vladek went through can be seen as incomparable, the inhumane treatment, scarce supplies and the deadly diseases that the Jews had to witness overall, just to suffer another day. Rephrase: 'The inhumane treatment, scarce supplies and deadly diseases Vladek faced daily were incomparable in their brutality.' The conditions were [need a verb or else the sentence is incomplete/a fragment] so bad and the food so scarce, that it was the perfect recipe to "die even more slowly". To give up and “to die, it is easy”, “But you have to struggle for life!” Never write sentences that are solid quote. Something more like: "While dying is presented as 'easy', [author] underscores the need to 'struggle for life'." You are writing the sentence, not relying on quotes to write it for you; you should just pinch a word or phrase here and there and integrate them smoothly into your own sentence. P.S. A person is classified as a survivor when they overcome situations where it is much easier to give up, then to persist and conquer. Surviving situations like this requires not only physical strength, but, more importantly, one must have the correct mindset and emotional stability to endure the conflict. That is what it takes, to become a survivor like Vladek.
Notes:
> Tense. Not important, but people often slip between tenses in essays which is bad, so practising writing ENTIRELY in present tense is helpful.
> Until the second-last sentence (which was your best sentence), you didn't actually fully address the question! Boiling it down, you've said - to be a survivor, you must... er... survive. You've more defined what a survivor is, than explained
how one becomes a survivor, what characteristics someone must have to survive. You should be delving more into what specific qualities the author is upholding, as qualities important for survival (be even more specific and use quotes/evidence/events to back it up). Can you contrast him with another character who doesn't survive? Just because it says 'like Vladek' doesn't mean you're restricted to solely discussing him, like you can say 'X character WASN'T a survivor like Vladek because, unlike Vladek, he...'
> Stick more closely to the text. Extended responses aren't essays, sure, or phrased like essays (though, while Idk the text, there could actually possibly be an essay question based on this idea!), but you should still treat them like text response essays since that's what you're practising for. In a text response, you CAN'T come to conclusions without referencing them through the lens of the text, like you can't say, 'surviving situations like this requires not only physical strength, but...' - you have to say '
Vladek's blah blah blah demonstrates that surviving situations...', or '[author] suggests that surviving situations...'. This is why in text response those verbs, reveals, demonstrates, conveys, illustrates etc. are REALLY REALLY vital; they help you to move between evidence from the text, and what message that shows. In context, sure, you're discussing the ideas, and the text is just a vehicle, but in text response, you can't ever make statements about life except in as far as the author or text demonstrates that.
> You need MORE specific textual evidence, exact examples where a certain quality of Vladek helps his survival or something.
> P.S. Picking on your quoting from the other ext response:
Vladek constantly stated that he remains a "strong man" throughout the Holocaust, “I was still strong, I could sit through the snow all night”. The 'strong man' quote is perfectly embedded, you see how it fits smoothly into your own sentence? BUT, the second quote isn't embedded; to be grammatical, you'd need a semi-colon before the quote, but even then that's just tacking on a chunk without fitting it into your flow. "Vladek's claim that he 'could sit through the snow all night', and constant statement that he remains a 'strong man'..."