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‘The journey towards reconciliation requires great sacrifice.’ Compare the way the two texts explore this idea. Both the novella Ransom by David Malouf and the film Invictus directed by Clint Eastwood shows that sacrifice is always needed for reconciliation. Malouf explores this idea mainly through Priam’s journey to ransom his son’s body while Eastwood depicts this concept on Mandela’s life. It is clear that despite the two texts based on different time and having a different focus, they still share the common idea of leaders sacrificing himself for reconciliation and for the country.
Leaders have to sacrifice themselves to create a positive relationship with the opponents that will lead towards reconciliation. Both Ransom and Invictus depict leaders who sacrifices something that are regarded as important by others. In Ransom, this idea was portrayed on Priam. Priam, despite being a king of Troy, was planning to ‘kneel to Achilles’, who is just a soldier. Also, when he visits Achilles he wears ‘plain-white robes’ instead of being ‘stripped of all glittering distractions and disguises’. This action could be seen as something that brings down Priam’s royal image and the pride of Troy. Also, especially considering the fact that Achilles was the murderer of his son Hector, lowering himself in front of his son’s murderer was something that cannot be done easily by ordinary people. But, Priam chose to act bravely since he was aware that revenge won’t solve the problem. As a result of Priam, sacrificing his royal image, and approaching Achilles as a man and as someone’s father rather than as a king, Priam was able to stop Achilles from being suspicious of his action and create a positive relationship with him at first glance.
Eastwood also shows the action of leader, Mandela, sacrificing himself to improve the relationship of Black and White South Africans and reunite South African society. Even though Mandela was ‘in prison for 27 years’ without a valid reason and had experienced the apartheid himself, he sacrifised the possible chance of revenge and the relationship with his family. Although he did it because he was already aware that it isn’t time for ‘petty revenge’ and only thinking emotionally ‘does not serve the nation’, still the fact that he sacrificed himself for the good relationship with the Afrikkaners doesn’t change. But the key difference between Invictus and Ransom is that Priam has sacrificed for himself and his family while Mandela has sacrificed for the country, which he refers to as ‘a very large family of 42 million’.