Hii
I've attempted an LA (without conclusion) on the following pieces (credit to HopefulLawStudent for the inspiration!)
Article one:
http://theconversation.com/naplan-testing-does-more-harm-than-good-26923 Article two:
http://www.theaustralian.com.au/opinion/editorials/tracking-students-basic-skills/story-e6frg71x-1226915103476 Cartoon:
http://nicholsoncartoons.com.au/naplan-not-used-effectively-by-teachers-cartoon-2013-05-20.html Could I please get feedback on it and (if possible) a score out of 10 please?
Thanks very much in advance
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Since its inception in 2008, the NAPLAN test has been a cause for continuous debate in Australian society. In her opinion piece “NAPLAN testing does more harm than good” (20/05/2014, The Conversation), Johanna Wynn expresses her disapproval of the test in a measured yet alarmed tone; she contends to parents that the NAPLAN test induces unnecessary stress in young students. In contrast, The Australian’s editor contends in a stern, resolute tone that the NAPLAN test is no more than a basic skills test that has proven to be beneficial to many schools. Nevertheless, Nicholson's satirical cartoon supports Wynn, contending in a derisive tone that the test is being misused by teachers to raise their own professional reputation.
Wynn seeks to discredit the efficacy of the NAPLAN test through her main argument that it destabilises students' mental well being, which in turn undermines the quality of their learning experience. Her view revolves around evidence from her personal research while simultaneously containing appeals to parents' concern for their children. From the outset, Johanna Wyn announces that "new research" has presented evidence against the benefits of the NAPLAN test, stirring doubts in readers' minds surrounding the quality of the NAPLAN test. Wyn's subsequent rhetorical question "is it worth it?" heightens readers' uncertainty and invites them to challenge the need for such a test. Indeed, Wyn progresses to present her own direct research to substantiate her view, with her authority as the Director of a youth research centre further adding credibility to her view in the eyes of readers. Wyn's research reveals that "90%" of teachers in Victoria in New South Wales had reported that students had experienced stress prior to taking the test. The enormous number of students that this represents, compounded by the fact that this had occurred in the two capital states of education, works to raise concern in parents - that it is highly likely their own children also felt the same way. Wyn heightens readers' anxiety, by declaring that the NAPLAN test is "plagued" by negative impacts on student well being, with the word "plagued" connoting rampant, infectious disease spreading uncontrollably. Indeed, Wyn reveals that this is not an exaggeration; she meticulously enumerates the various symptoms of stress displayed by some suffering students, such as "insomnia, hyperventilation, profuse sweating" to illustrate the NAPLAN test as even potentially life-threatening. The thought that a mere written task could jeopardise their children's health to such extent elicits fear and thus, mobilises parents' desire to protect their children from such potent threat. When juxtaposed with Wyn's image, this further unsettles readers; the image portrays a diligent young girl concentrating on what appears to be her NAPLAN test, yet Wyn's research evinces the underlying, insidious damage that is being wrought by the test on her, and therefore all such children, who are often perceived as vulnerable and naïve. Such revelation works to generate an outcry from parents at the purported inner torture that their children are being subjected to, ultimately positioning them to condemn the test. Wynn concludes by affirming this need to reject the test as she proclaims that to do so is in the "best interests" of Australian children; this brings to readers' minds their own personal desires to provide what is best for their child, thus motivating them to denounce the test for their children's sake.
Conversely, The Australian's editor openly criticises Wyn's fears for students' welfare, insisting that the test is completely harmless and a necessary education resource for students, teachers and parents alike. The editor adopts a more assertive and optimistic tone than Wyn to reassure readers of the safety of the test. Like Wyn, their argument primarily relies on evidence to convey its rationality; however, the editor draws upon research over time to illustrate the progressive contribution of the NAPLAN test to Australian's education system. Specifically, the editor highlights that students and teachers have adjusted their learning and teaching practices accordingly since the first NAPLAN test in 2008, with the 2014 data to be "the most informative yet", as Year 9 students will be able to track their progress "for the first time" since Year 3. In this passage, the editor's tone is imbued with enthusiasm, and the prospect of an unprecedented outlook on students' learning over time is bound to appeal to parents. Wyn further heightens readers' excitement by outlining how the test could even enhance students' prospects in future employment, advanced school subjects and higher education; a perspective not taken by Wyn, who only dwells on the test's immediate effects. As a result, parents are positioned the appreciate the test a little more, as one that does have its merits.
Furthermore, the editor directly targets Wyn's argument, refuting it in deeming the test a fundamental yet simple, undemanding test. They dismiss opposers of the test such as Wyn as "habitual naysayers", casting them as relentlessly cynical and a blatant nuisance to purposeful programs like the NAPLAN test. Thereby, readers are encouraged to equally belittle them for their lack of understanding and ignorance of the test's good intents. By contrast, the editor claims that "the testing is not onerous". From the direct, forthright nature of the line, readers infer that the editor's view is conclusive. This is augmented by the editor's repetitive emphasis on the test's simplicity, in maintaining that the test measures "minimum standards… basic skills," inculcating upon readers the idea that the test is not at all laborious. Hence, readers may feel that their uncertainties surrounding the burden of the test - generated by Wyn - are resolved, inviting them to more openly embrace the test. The editor concludes their own piece by mimicking parents' high hopes for their children's future, affirming that "parents expect no less" for what is "in the interest of students". As they thus demonstrate that they share parents' values, readers may believe that the editor's interests correspond to their own. Hence they may be manoeuvred to emulate the editor's praise and endorsement of the NAPLAN test.
Nicholson's satirical cartoon follows in Wyn's footsteps, arguing that children are becoming too bogged down by the pressure to perform in the NAPLAN test. The cartoon depicts a group of dissatisfied teachers glaring down at a young student who shows them some writing on a blackboard that appears to be his own. Rather than appearing solemn or even guilty at the boy's spelling errors - which imply their own ineffective teaching methods - the teachers only express contempt at the boy, insinuating that they are only fixated on the boy's inability to spell. In this way, readers are positioned to condemn the teachers, as their reproachful looks directed solely at the boy imply that they are placing overwhelming pressure on the boy to produce academic results. The fact that the boy's writing frames teachers as the ones subjected to the test, rather than students, also suggests this obsession with the test. In this sense, Nicholson suggests that the NAPLAN test has driven teachers to run results-oriented lessons "not conducive to… deep learning", as phrased by Wyn, garnering parents' criticism of the test.