Haven't really been around the English boards that much, so please take my advice as a grain of salt (+ I am also doing English this year).
I am going to assume this a body paragraph.
Response:The writer contends how the recently elected American president has sparked disapproval of Trump supporters in the international community.
This sentence seems quite odd. I think this sentence can definitely have a stronger expression + better vocab (ie. Adopting a ____ tone, the writer (use the last name of the writer if given) castigates/ maligns .... (subject)... through/ for.... (evidence). As most Americans desire “freedom and fairness”, the writer belittles Trump supporters for choosing an “idiot to lead them”
It's good to see that you have used evidence to support your contention. I think you could have written: The writer belittles American supporters for supporting Donald Trump who abides by materialism, rather than ... (whatever you wish to say), as the writer claims that "no reasonable person would have predicted" the success of Donald Trump in such a "nation.. [that] espouses freedom and fairness for its people". (Note: this is not a perfect example) . Using irony and a critical tone,
It's best not to mention persuasive devices the writer aims to reinforce Trump’s unsuitability for presidency
how (I mean where's the proof)? and what effect does it have on the readers?. The word “idiot” is generally associated with reckless endangerment and mindless thinking which
portrays to all (don't assume that all his readers will be affected by his argument) is likely to position/ convey his/her readers that their lives are at stake with Trump as
the president. Thus, the writer also appeals to the patriotic readers to act before their country is tarnished
It would be better if you merge the previous sentence with this one, as you have already mentioned the affect (or effect? ) on his readers in the previous sentence . Shifting to a hopeful tone, the writer
discourages this doesn't make sensereaders who have not been affected by this “idiocy” to not accept Trump’s flawed thinking. By flattering them of having a “working brain”, reader may feel that they are decent and support the writer
This sentence seem quite clunky- How does the writer saying that the reader has a "working brain" make them support the writer? You need to explain this in more depth. . Overall, the writer condemns the ““Trump phenomenon” and uses various devices
again, mention the arguments, not the devices to highlight the foolish danger Trump supporters have gotten America into.
Some points I would like to share.
- Don't mention the devices used by the writer, instead explain how his arguments (+ tone) effect the reader (and in what way).
- You shouldn't imply that all the readers are effected by the writer's argument.